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smiles and laughter

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i live for the good times


I'm sure there's many to come

Written for iLonewolf 
© 2015 - 2024 themaninroomfive
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Hey there,

 

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

 

I’m going to start by saying that I enjoy reading short works of poetry- I like pieces that can say a lot with just a few words. Having said that, your poem certainly embodies what I enjoy about shorter works. It’s short but to the point. It’s honest and direct. It’s relatable and it put a smile on my face. I don’t have any constructive feedback to offer. I like this just the way it is.